This term we have been looking at ways to make our writing more interesting for the reader.

We have used the following criteria to guide us:

• Changing the word order of a sentence
• Using literary devices such as metaphor, simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia and  personification
• Using specific verbs and adjectives
• Using  show, don’t tell techniques
• Using different sentence beginnings and lengths

Here are some examples of my writing this term.

Show Don’t Tell - Emotions

Happy: My tired arms thrust high into the air as I finally stepped across the finish line. A huge smile covered my red-hot, sweaty face when I saw my parents cheering for me in the crowd. My heart beat wildly with pride.

Angry: my fists were clenched in frustration as i saw an empty jar with crumbs. A growl came from my mouth as i turned away. I saw my brother with crumbs n his face so i knew he had eaten the last cookie.

Sad: My eyes began to fill with tears as I waked down the street all alone. My ‘friends’ walked past laughing at me probably.… at least it felt that way. I had no one to talk to. No shoulder to cry on. I felt alone.

                                   Music writing story

It was an average day for the villagers of temmie village. The sun was shining, kids were screaming in joy. But all of a sudden a foul smell began to form around the village. Out of nowhere a stranger appears and begins to murder everyone in sight. He was not alone another man was stood next to him he looked like a doctor but.. He couldn’t be. He seemed to be putting things in bags, humongous ones. “ oh i’m gonna eat you up” said the guy whilst evil laughing. It was clear what he was gonna do with the bodies. But then in the blink of an eye a guy with a big cheesy smile approaches. “ don’t you move even the slightest or you're going to get a serious beating” the mystery man says whilst winking. No one expected what happened next.

“How could they do this to me it’s not fair” i said as i was going crazy from anger. I put on my viking helmet and stormed into my room punching everything I could find. My mother said “ Are you ok”. “Noooo!!!!!” I replied, “now go away”. I began to scream.my brother knocked on my door and said “ look im sorry i ate the last donut”. “You should be” I shouted aggressively.

I  was walking to the shops after school feeling distant from my other classmates. they don’t accept me for who i am. “ oh look it’s you, the short potato” stated bob as he walked past me. “Don’t call me that!” i shouted in anger whilst storming off so he couldn’t follow me. But it didn’t work because all of a sudden he was next to me “i think you just lost your money so make this easy and hand it over”. “Why should i”. Bob was clenching his fists “time for a beating” he said smirking . “please just leave me alone” i insisted walking off then i started to run. “ hEY GET BACK HERE!!!!!” now i was sprinting as fast as my legs could take me.Luckily i made my escape and now was outside my front door. “ i’ll see you tomorrow you short potato” bob said whilst walking off. I sighed and went inside to my room. I knew the same thing was gonna happen over and over again.